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“Sir, please keep a closer eye on your
gun. It’s frightening
the other customers.”
“Sir, I believe
I asked you to watch your gun! People
are feeling threatened by it!”
“Sir, your gun is in the child’s
section, and the children are worried.
Please do something about this.”
“Sir, store policy is that all guns must be supervised
at all times
by their guardians.”
“Sir, I’m afraid
that if you cannot control your gun,
we’re going to have to
ask you to leave.”
“Sir, you’ve been warned enough. I’m afraid—
Oh. Oh. Well, sir. It seems you have
complete control of your gun.
My mistake.
I apologize.
I’ll just be
leaving
now.”
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My poetry professor took us on a blindfolded field trip to the library to convince us to use our other senses when we wrote the assignment "Looking at Guernica" ( [link]) was written for, and once there, he had us pull out a random book from the shelves, still blindfolded.
And then he told us to write a poem with the same title.
Other people got some pretty cool titles. What did I get? "Gun Control." I was stumped for a while, because seriously, who wants to write a poem called "Gun Control"? How boring is that?
And then I decided I wasn't really going to write about gun control, and this happened.
Critique-type questions that I would REALLY appreciate if you answered at least one of:
1) Is it funny? Funny is what I was going for.
2) Line breaks. I always want help with line breaks. Do mine work? Can you see better ones?
3) Does this sound like a store employee? Are there better word choices?
4) General suggestions for improvement, did I make any mistakes?
And then he told us to write a poem with the same title.
Other people got some pretty cool titles. What did I get? "Gun Control." I was stumped for a while, because seriously, who wants to write a poem called "Gun Control"? How boring is that?
And then I decided I wasn't really going to write about gun control, and this happened.
Critique-type questions that I would REALLY appreciate if you answered at least one of:
1) Is it funny? Funny is what I was going for.
2) Line breaks. I always want help with line breaks. Do mine work? Can you see better ones?
3) Does this sound like a store employee? Are there better word choices?
4) General suggestions for improvement, did I make any mistakes?
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XD I love this one!!